Wednesday, 7 February 2018

A Perambulator Haiku

In a Paris park
Four prams on collision course
They make a big crèche

 

This post is my submission to haiku my heart


 

9 comments:

Mark M. Redfearn said...

I'm not sure whether to laugh or cry. Perhaps a bit of both? :)

Lea said...

Quite a clever haiku! Mais Oui?

Cathy Keller said...

A pretty visual haiku. Well done.

rebecca said...

delightful mayhem! thanks for joining haiku my heart derek happy to have you here!

Magical Mystical Teacher said...

I think there may be three prams too many!

carol l mckenna said...

speaks of the joy and sorrow of life perhaps or how human we are ~

Happy Weekend to you,
A ShutterBug Explores,
aka (A Creative Harbor)

gma said...

Love it.

J C said...

My vivid imagination can see this disaster about to happen.

Derek Dupp said...

Hi everyone
Thanks for your kind and generous responses to my meagre attempt at haiku. I do appreciate you all and will certainly be back to give this another try.

MarkMR, I prefer laughter but either response is fine.... or a mixture of both.

Lea, mais oui.... but yes.... thanks for your kind words and humour.

CathyK, Thanks.

Rebecca, I'm pleased that you enjoyed this and thank you for saying so. Thanks too for your kind welcome to your delightful haiku group.
I've tried to leave a comment on your page a couple of times but it doesn't seem to be appearing. I'll give it another go in a mo.

MagicalMT, your maths is spot on! Thanks for your delightful comment.

CarolIMcK, Thanks. Thanks too to the adorable Zoe.

gma, Thanks. I'm pleased, and grateful.

JC, Let's hope that it never does.... if it hasn't already....

Take care everyone.
Have a good weekend.